Blog Post #4

I think that paper #1 should receive an A or at least a high B. This paper had a clearly stated thesis, used sources, was able to keep my attention, and used well educated words that I was able to easily read. This writer also used the sources to prove their point, rather then use the source to come up with an opinion. Since the paper has a clear thesis, the paper was layed out well, and was clearly organized to get the point across of Limiting Foreign Athletics in the US. The only negatives about this paper, was the topic itself wasn't too interesting, and ended up being repetitive, but overall I still continued to read it to get the writers opinion.

I think that paper #2 should be given a D at the highest. This paper had many grammar and spelling errors, improper use of punctuation, and an unclear thesis. The writer should have asked for more help when revising and editing. It definitely looks like a last minute thing. The paragraph with the questions is very poor and the writer should have looked into sentence variation with a question better. The paper does however use three sources and cites them correctly, but overall there is a lot to be done with this paper.

I think that paper #3 should receive an A. This paper was well written, had a clear thesis, good sources, and no visible spelling or grammar errors. The only thing I would possibly fix was the paragraph about twins, I wasn't sure if that was really necessary to go with the thesis of divorce. The writer had a good topic to start off, and it was a paper that I was able to read without forcing myself too. Also, the sources were well used to help with the thesis statement.

I think that paper #4 should be given the grade of a C or low B. To me the paper didn't use all the cited sources on the works cited page, and seemed more of an opinion paper. Maybe because I am a girl the paper wasn't all that exciting, but still I was able to read it because I agree with some of the opinions stated by the writer. I didn't notice and spelling or grammar errors, and the paper was nicely layed out. The writer had a good clarity of thought and stated their opinion throughout the whole paper.

Magazine Ad

The Magazine Title I have chosen my ad in is called Cosmopolitan. The targeted audience for this magazine is the middle class especially young teenagers to women, ages 15-23. This magazine is sometimes known as "the bible" because there are many tips about how to improve your looks and get into the popular fashion scence, or just read about sex. Also, the woman on the cover always has an interesting story inside which is always fun to read.

The product of the advertisement is Benadryl. In this ad it is shown from what seems to be a teenage boy and teenage girl about to kiss in black and right, and the space inbetween their lips there is a pink pause button. The reason for this pause button is clearly stated underneath. It says "You can't pause butterflies.""Benadryl is more effective than the leading allergy medicine at relieving your worst symptons. And works when you need it most. You can't pause life." The ad is implying that if you buy Benadryl and use it regualry as your allergy medicine then you will not have such bad symptoms and will not to put important things such as getting butterflies from a kiss aside due to bad allergies. The words "You can't pause butterflies." is larger then all the other text because it is trying to reinforce the small print below about taking the product so you can enjoy life.

Having the pause button be pink in the center of a black and white photograph is used to show that the pill itself is pink. Using contrasting colors and making it in the center, I believe that that is the part that catches your eye the most due to the color and position. From the pink pause button my eye was drawn to the picture it is pausing. This being the teenage couple getting ready to kiss.